Jet Kaylock

CHARACTER

Name:  Jet Kaylock

Age:  19

Gender:  Male

Occupation:  Weapon Smith/Student

Appearance: Tall, Shaggy Black hair with Dark green tips, square jaw, Emerald eyes, Tan from working outside at his forge most of every day, Muscular from all of the hammering, moving,  and shaping of metal, covered in burn scars. Typically found wearing black jeans and an armored t-shirt and green vest, sulking in the corner of the room if not at a forge somewhere.
http://kolyei.deviantart.com/art/Jet-Kaylock-pic-433574260

History: Born into a family of weapon smiths he spent all of his time in the armory and smithy, watching his parents work, and learning how to craft weapons, instead of playing with other children. His first experience with other kids his age was when he went to Signal Academy, however, he avoided others in preference to being at the forge, working on his craft. He is quiet when he does interact with others, as he tends to not like being the center of attention. As a child he would have to stand up to his drunkard of a father to protect his little brother. However, after his father locked his brother in the closet, Jet toke his brother out to live in the woods away from their father, learning the way the forest reacts to sounds and movements. After living in the woods for 3 years, his brother went home to stand up to their father, leaving Jet alone in the woods. Jet learned that a loud person can't hunt so he watched how the forest predators hunted, mainly the lynx. Quietly crawling close to the prey then leaping out to make the kill. After years in the woods he looks forward to learning how to be of some use against the Creatures of Grimm. And to protect those who cannot protect themselves. After he saw a family hiking through the woods get caught by a pack of Beowolves he swore to learn how to protect others and thus applied to Beacon Academy and through his determination he was accepted on the grounds of his creative problem solving skill and his stealth.

Personality: He's quiet to a fault, Won't share his opinion if it contradicts the common view, Slow to react to people; i.e. make friends but, once he does befriend someone, he would gladly throw his life on the line to save them. Constantly shifting his attention to different objects, or points, making him distracted. Tends to prefer avoiding being in a group of people, unless someone he befriended asks him too. when the going gets tough, he makes a stand, unwilling to give in or run. He constantly fears the worst, be it a betrayal or a death.The one kid everyone sees but no one really knows, always trying to be under the radar.

Strength:  Able to slip through forested areas quietly, crafting weapons of any form, Strong Control of his Aura to strengthen his bolts, Good shot with his Crossbow, Able to take what is around him and make something useful, Loyal to his friends should he make any, Protective over things and friends

Weakness: He can't hide and strike in one on one combat, Large scale battle scares him, Not confident, Indifferent about the suffering of those he has not befriended.

Semblance: Pattern Sight: The ability to see patterns then predict what's going to happen (50% chance of being correct). Such as seeing an attack pattern or a weak-spot in a defensive pattern. He stops and sends his Aura out to read the other Auras around him feeling out the situation, judging the chance of different actions happening. this takes all of his focus and prevents him from moving for at least a 30 second burst to 5 minutes, depending on how long he was using it.

WEAPON

Name:The Huntsmen

Primary Form: Crossbow: Fires through a hole in the center of the Ax blade and the string is recessed into the back of the blade if it is not in the Crossbow mode.

Secondary Form: Great Ax: A two handed Ax with a large blade built in two pieces that separate if needed and has the rifle folded and ready to fire out of 1/3 of the barrel.

Tertiary Form: Long Rifle: A basic semi-automatic magazine fed .50 caliber rifle, using the back side of one piece to the Ax for the butt-stock, and the other as a mono-pod to increase the stability of the rifle, and a Red dot scope.

History:A weapon he made while learning to craft weapons, constantly upgrading/ fine-tuning. Originally only a crossbow, his parents said he would never be a great weapon smith if he didn't incorporate multiple weapons into one. Adding the ax balanced the crossbow for better accuracy and prevented awkward slinging of the crossbow across his back. The long rifle was added as a precautionary step for long distance battles, as his crossbow only shoots 50 yards accurately. The Ax head swivels from the front of the Crossbow to the left hand side from the holders view and locks there for the Great Ax mode. It then can be removed and split into two pieces for the Long Rifle, and forms a bi-pod, with an attachable red dot scope on the top of the rifle. Made from a metal alloy he made with titanium and steel it's light weight but very sturdy. A dark grey color with dark green X's by the handle of the Great Ax it is very hard to see in the dark hours in any forest.

This is going to need more details in a few places. First of all personality, while all these traits are good things to add to a personality you need to go into how these things affect him. How do these traits cause home to act around others, does he enjoy working with others or is he more likely to do things on his own? How would he act if forced into one of these? 

For your strengths and weaknesses it's pretty much the same thing, more details. How does stealth help him in combat? Everyone has aura, how is his a strength? Is he very proficient at it or can he use it faster than most? I think you need more combat weaknesses than just open combat and add details to those as well. 

The semblance is one part I'm not too sure about. First it definitely needs more details as to how he does that and second I think it should have less of a chance to be successful since it's almost the ability to dodge any attack at the moment. 

The weapon's forms need more detail as well. What do they look like, what color are they, do they have any markings or symbols? As well as how it changes from one form to another. All in all more details are needed almost everywhere.

Updated it, Let me know if it needs more.

Looks pretty much good to me. Approved 1 of 2

Thank you!

Approved!

Edited the Occupation, and added a detail I forgot to the History, Thank you!

Edited the occupation and history to reflect his application and acceptance to Beacon